gender blog redone

In the article,"Women raising the bar at colleges," it gave facts about how women are doing way better in college than guys. This article was written from a sexist viewpoint because it gave only one side of the story that is, the reasons girls in general were doing better and the reason guys in general were doing poorly. If I could rewrite this article, I would also talk about why individual girls were doing poorly and individual guys were doing well. This might shed better light on the general reasons stated in the article's thesis. I would make it sound less sexist and give multiple points from multiple sources. Overall this article could have used some refining and a new point of view.